Are these sentences correct?

[nihongolearn__]

You don't need to stick to your previous versions or my translations, right?

yes, i have to stick to the japanese writing that you gave me that i have now

was all that hard work, getting all that, for nothing, then?

i'm happy with the japanese that i have right now

i really just need to know how you say the last couple of things:

''my very favourite songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai'',

''your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great'',

''and i hope you have a nice christmas'',

''i sang "Synchro Tokimeki" because it looked fun, and i really like that song when you sang it, akari''

& ''i sang ''yokaze no shiwaza'' because i like that song & it sounded lovely when you sung it, churi, and it's a really pretty song''

pretty please?

if it helps, i'll use the reason why i wanted to sing those songs, that i got from you

 

[Toritoribe]

i just mean that it's kinda hard to know what the english is for the japanese that you gave me that is on
post #95.
i can't exactly type in the english version of my letters if i don't know, can i?

i'm happy with the japanese that i have right now

Oh, I'm very glad you are happy with my Japanese sentences regardless of your not being able to understand what it means exactly. Then, I will rewrite the whole letters in the way I like, using just the gist of your original, and probably ignoring some part of it. Please wait until then.

 

[nihongolearn__]

Oh, I'm very glad you are happy with my Japanese sentences regardless of your not being able to understand what it means exactly. Then, I will rewrite the whole letters in the way I like, using just the gist of your original, and probably ignoring some part of it. Please wait until then.

thanks
but can't we just go with how you did it with ''それと、遅ればせながら、神セブン入りおめでとうございます！? like how you translated my sentence ''congratulatons on getting to top 7 in the Senbatsu Sousenkyo'' and then extended it and then you told me where to add it and then i added it to the letter that that i already have right now

i just need the last few things translated, that's all:

''my very favourite songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai'',

''your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great'',

''and i hope you have a nice christmas''

''i sang "Synchro Tokimeki" because it looked fun, and i really like that song when you sang it, akari''



it's true that i was moved by churi's singing yokaze no shiwaza, though. that's true, because she sounded lovely



we don't really need to rewrite all of it, do we?

i sort of understand what they mean
i'm not the one who's going to receiving them, anyway, right?
and i think akari & akane will be able to read just fine anyway, so it's all good, isn't it?

 

[nihongolearn__]

thanks
but can't we just go with how you did it before with ''それと、遅ればせながら、神セブン入りおめでとうございます！? like how you translated my sentence ''congratulatons on getting to top 7 in the Senbatsu Sousenkyo'' and then extended it and then you told me where to add it and then i added it to the letter that that i already have right now

i just need the last few things translated, that's all:

''my very favourite songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai'',

''your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great'',

''and i hope you have a nice christmas''

''i sang "Synchro Tokimeki" because it looked fun, and i really like that song when you sang it, akari''



it's true that i was moved by churi's singing yokaze no shiwaza, though (as said in your example). that's true, because she sounded lovely



we don't really need to rewrite all of it, do we?

i sort of understand what they mean
i'm not the one who's going to be receiving them, anyway, right?
and i think akari & akane will be able to read just fine anyway, so it's all good

akane's letter:

akari's letter:

 

[nihongolearn__]

thanks
but can't we just go with how you did it with ''それと、遅ればせながら、神セブン入りおめでとうございます！? like how you translated my sentence ''congratulatons on getting to top 7 in the Senbatsu Sousenkyo'' and then extended it and then you told me where to add it and then i added it to the letter that that i already have right now

i just need the last few things translated, that's all:

''my very favourite songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai'',

''your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great'',

''and i hope you have a nice christmas''

''i sang "Synchro Tokimeki" because it looked fun, and i really like that song when you sang it, akari''



it's true that i was moved by churi's singing yokaze no shiwaza, though. that's true, because she sounded lovely



we don't really need to rewrite all of it, do we?

i sort of understand what they mean
i'm not the one who's going to receiving them, anyway, right?
and i think akari & akane will be able to read just fine anyway, so it's all good, isn't it?

akane's letter:

akari's letter:

 

[nihongolearn__]

Oh, I'm very glad you are happy with my Japanese sentences regardless of your not being able to understand what it means exactly.

can you check these over for me, please? : your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great - あなたの最新シングル「金の愛、銀の愛」は素晴らしいです。


and i hope you have a nice christmas - そして、あなたが素敵なクリスマスを迎えられますように。

i hope you like this christmas present - クリスマス プレゼントを気に入ってくれると嬉しいです。

このブレスレットとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。


matsui jurina:

松井珠理奈様,
メリークリスマス！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
クリスマス プレゼントを気に入ってくれると嬉しいです。

このブレスレットとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。

PS. 9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあったんです

「夜風の仕業」、「不器用太陽」、「シンクロときめき」, 「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」 「遠くにいても」 それと 「きよしこのよる」 歌いました。
イギリス在住のじゅりなファン Charlotte Hart より


kizaki yuria:

木﨑ゆりあ様,
メリークリスマス！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
クリスマス プレゼントを気に入ってくれると嬉しいです
このブレスレットとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。
PS. 9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあったんです
「夜風の仕業」、「不器用太陽」、「シンクロときめき」, 「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」 「遠くにいても」 それと 「きよしこのよる」 歌いました。
イギリス在住のゆりあファン Charlotte Hart より





also, i'm only asking about the christmas one's because i've been thinking about it for a while

please believe me, i do want to get these done

 

[Toritoribe]

Somewhat awkward but understandable enough.

 

[nihongolearn__]

Somewhat awkward but understandable enough.

can you check this over for me too, please? i forgot to write it : my very favourite ske48 songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai - 私の一番好きなSKE48の曲は「不器用太陽」と「だって、雨じゃない」です。





a simple question i wanted to ask, though: i wanted to write 'please don't open until christmas' (Kurisumasu made hirakenaide kudasai - クリスマスまで開けないでください) for the bracelets parts

(either that or 'please don't open this christmas present until christmas' - Kurisumasu made, kono kurisumasu purezento o hirakenaide kudasai - クリスマスまで、このクリスマスプレゼントを開けないでください (which one is better, i wonder. if that's even correct )

but over there in japan, i was wondering if they say that,

i mean, is it appropriate?

 

[Toritoribe]

Yes for the first question.

The reading of 開けないで is "akenaide", not "hirakenaide".
The latter is repetitive.

Could sound rude, but the recipients know it's written by a non-native speaker, after all.

 

[nihongolearn__]

Yes for the first question.

The reading of 開けないで is "akenaide", not "hirakenaide".
The latter is repetitive.

Could sound rude, but the recipients know it's written by a non-native speaker, after all.

do you have any suggestions on where in jurina's letter & yuria's letter to put these? (since those letter's are slightly shorter)



- あなたの最新シングル「金の愛、銀の愛」は素晴らしいです。 (your newest single Kin no Ai, Gin no Ai is great) (just for jurina's letter, since i know that since yuria's in akb48 now)


そして、あなたが素敵なクリスマスを迎えられますように。 (and i hope you have a nice christmas)


私の一番好きなSKE48の曲は「不器用太陽」と「だって、雨じゃない」です。(my very favourite ske48 songs are bukiyou taiyou and datte, ame janai)

- (i do have many favourites of ske48 songs, but i can't really list all my favourites, that'd be too many)

- (even though, she didn't sing in the song; datte, ame janai, i wonder if i should put it in jurina's letter, anyway, since it's still ske)



クリスマスまで、このクリスマスプレゼントをあけないでください (please don't open this christmas present until christmas)

 

[Toritoribe]

The same position where you would put them in English letters, i.e., as you like.

 

[nihongolearn__]

The same position where you would put them in English letters, i.e., as you like.

i know but, you won't give me any suggestions for them, like you did with the sotsugyo line in akari's letter?

 

[Toritoribe]

You can write your letters in English, right? Do it like that.
You don't need to make your letters sound perfectly natural. Whether it could sound somewhat rude or awkward, the recipients no doubt understand that the writer is a non-native speaker and means no offense. The same goes to other letters. There is no problem with doing it as you like.

 

[nihongolearn__]

Whether it could sound somewhat rude or awkward, the recipients no doubt understand that the writer is a non-native speaker and means no offense.

i've been meaning to ask; which and where in post #106 was somewhat awkward, i wonder?

 

[nihongolearn__]

You don't need to make your letters sound perfectly natural. Whether it could sound somewhat rude or awkward, the recipients no doubt understand that the writer is a non-native speaker and means no offense.

i was wondering if there's a better way of saying 'and i hope you have a nice christmas' in japanese
other than 'そして、あなたが素敵なクリスマスを迎えられますように。'





i was thinking of something else too - Happy holidays! - Ii kyuuka wo! , Enjoy the holidays! - Kyuuka wo tanoshinde ne! or Best wishes for the new year! - Shinnen ga yoi toshi de arimasu you ni.

i found them on this website: 10 Japanese Phrases for Holidays, Christmas, New Years
but i wasn't sure which one to choose

 

[nihongolearn__]

You don't need to make your letters sound perfectly natural. Whether it could sound somewhat rude or awkward, the recipients no doubt understand that the writer is a non-native speaker and means no offense. The same goes to other letters. There is no problem with doing it as you like.

i wonder if i should do the christmas half akari & akane's letters seperately
because i think it would get in the way of the birthday half of those letters

i think i'll do that. so i can concentrate on writing down that half

 

[Toritoribe]

As you like, as already said.

i've been meaning to ask; which and where in post #106 was somewhat awkward, i wonder?

The flow of the sentences, for instance, but the point is "understandable enough".

 

[nihongolearn__]

i was just thinking; which one of these do you think is best; Happy holidays! - Ii kyuuka wo! , Enjoy the holidays! - Kyuuka wo tanoshinde ne! or Best wishes for the new year! - Shinnen ga yoi toshi de arimasu you ni.

i wasn't sure which one to choose

i found them on this website: 10 Japanese Phrases for Holidays, Christmas, New Years

 

[Toritoribe]

Those are all correct, so I said "as you like".

 

[nihongolearn__]

Those are all correct, so I said "as you like".

i just thinking that maybe i should swap 'google+' for 'twitter on my letters, but i'm not sure

i'm thinking that twitter mightbe easier


and i'm thinking about adding 'と思います' on the end of 'あなたの最新シングル「金の愛、銀の愛 」は素晴らしいです。' in replace of 'です。'

 

[Toritoribe]

You can write it as you like since it's your letter after all, as I repeatedly pointed out.

 

[nihongolearn__]

You can write it as you like since it's your letter after all, as I repeatedly pointed out.

i know
i only said that because i thought that 'あなたの最新シングル「金の愛、銀の愛 」は素晴らしいと思います' might sound better then 'あなたの最新シングル「金の愛、銀の愛 」は素晴らしいです。'

 

[Toritoribe]

Both are correct. You can use the one you prefer.

 

[nihongolearn__]

Both are correct. You can use the one you prefer.

i'm also wondering about which one to use: 'google +' or 'twitter'

i mean, like, which one people use more

 

[Toritoribe]

The point is not "people" but "she/they". I don't know, but you must know it.