That is a beautiful poem you wrote, Mac, although I liked the original rendering, "touched the face of Son of Heaven" because it retains the kanji meaning of tennou 窶弖ツ皇, a distinctively Japanese expression for Son of Heaven.
However I somehow feel uncomfortable with the glorification of the kamikaze fighter pilots for four reasons. 1) It dehumanised the Japanese youths by leading them to death, and eventual defeat in the war. 2) It disregards the 20 some million victims of the Great Asian War/Pacific War of 1931-1945 by the blanking out of their historical reality of victimisation in the blinding glorification. 3) The historical distortion eg. in the Fushousha textbook controversy pushed by/with governmental (backing) has had a damaging effect on the youths' understanding of Asia's reality. 4) The kamikaze pilots were most likely on amphetamines, so what they touched was probably not God, not the face of the tennou either. Sorry to be a spoiler, but historical accuracy must not be glided over for poetic effect on this forum. But yes, the noble feelings you expressed are beautiful nonetheless.