Creating Artwork with Japanese text, Need advice

[briidea]

Hey Guys, I am creating some artwork using Japanese. I want to make sure it reads OK or is acceptable positioning of the symbols.

 

[Toritoribe]

The lines go from right to left in vertical writing.

 

[briidea]

The lines go from right to left in vertical writing.

Ok so it looks wrong to you? Does the curve throw things off or is the text legible?

 

[Toritoribe]

The curve is not problem at all, and what it represents is understandable (since な柔術古典的 doesn't make sense). It's just uncommon and odd. BTW, what do you want to mean by 古典的な柔術?

 

[briidea]

The curve is not problem at all, and what it represents is understandable (since な柔術古典的 doesn't make sense). It's just uncommon and odd. BTW, what do you want to mean by 古典的な柔術?

I just want it to read , classic jiu jitsu. The Top and bottom characters that are circled are meant to read together as Maeda. Thanks for the help I appreciate it

 

[Toritoribe]

I would use 伝統柔術 instead.