That's a translation of your original English sentences. Few revisions are needed, though.
It's not me, but are you talking about the two "are"s in the title?
You can edit your post instead of multiple continuous posting, as Chris-san suggested.
Are you going to send the letters and presents before you sing, or after you really sing? If the former, 歌う予定です/歌うつもりです/歌おうと思っています is more appropriate than telling a lie.
It's useless to explain タレントショー to me. I already read the article in Wikipedia. They definitely don't know about タレントショー either, so you need to explain about it also to them in the letters, if you want to use the term.
掲載しませんか is indeed a polite form, but it's asking for doing that directly to the addressee whether もしよかったら is there or not. However, 載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです is just telling your wish "I'm happy if you do that". It acts as an indirect request, and therefore sounds more humble/less pushy. Makes sense?
Here's my attempt;
須田亜香里様
お誕生日おめでとうございます！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
イルカが好きかどうか分からないけど、気に入ってもらえたでしょうか。
このぬいぐるみとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。
PS.
以前あかりんさんが歌っていた「シンクロときめき」を聞いてすごく感動しました。
9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあるんですが、そこでこの歌を歌おうと思っています。
あと4曲、「不器用太陽」、「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」それと「遠くにいても」も歌う予定です。
イギリス在住のあかりんファンより
高柳明音様
お誕生日おめでとうございます！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
鳥が好きかどうか分からないけど、気に入ってもらえたでしょうか。
このぬいぐるみとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。
PS.
以前ちゅりさんが歌っていた「夜風の仕業」を聞いてすごく感動しました。
9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあるんですが、そこでこの歌を歌おうと思っています。
あと4曲、「不器用太陽」、「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」それと「遠くにいても」も歌う予定です。
イギリス在住のちゅりさんファンより
By the way, are you going to send the letters and presents to the two of them?
須田亜香里様
高柳明音様
As I said in my previous post, シンクロときめき and 夜風の仕業 are not their original songs, so you need to explain why you mention these songs specifically in your letters to them. 以前あかりんさんが歌っていた「シンクロときめき」を聞いてすごく感動しました。and 以前ちゅりさんが歌っていた「夜風の仕業」を聞いてすごく感動しました。 are the explanation; "I was moved by your singing the song".
か何か makes your request sound more humble. That's why I added it.
You shouldn't "merge" her translation you got in another forum and mine. We used different levels of polite forms. She is indeed fluent in Japanese, but wouldn't be a native speaker. 鳥が好きだと知っています sounds awkward (too much translatese), for instance.
Here's the revised version. (For confirmation, you are going to sing 6 songs; 夜風の仕業, 不器用太陽, シンクロときめき, ウィンブルドンへ連れていって, 未来とは？ and 遠くにいても, right?)
須田亜香里様
お誕生日おめでとうございます！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
イルカが好きかどうか分からないけど、気に入ってもらえたでしょうか。
このぬいぐるみとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。
PS.
以前あかりんさんが歌っていた「シンクロときめき」を聞いてすごく感動しました。
9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあったんですが、実はそこでこの歌を歌ったんです。
あと5曲、「夜風の仕業」、「不器用太陽」、「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」それと「遠くにいても」も歌いました。
イギリス在住のあかりんファン Charlotte Hart より
高柳明音様
お誕生日おめでとうございます！
プレゼントは届きましたか？
鳥が好きだと聞いたことがあるんですが、気に入ってもらえたでしょうか。
このぬいぐるみとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。
PS.
以前ちゅりさんが歌っていた「夜風の仕業」を聞いてすごく感動しました。
9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあったんですが、実はそこでこの歌を歌ったんです。
あと5曲、「不器用太陽」、「シンクロときめき」、「ウィンブルドンへ連れていって」、「未来とは？」それと「遠くにいても」も歌いました。
イギリス在住のちゅりさんファン Charlotte Hart より
My one is formal.i was just wondering, though; which one is better: those ones
or these ones: 亜香里 へ
明音 へ
Is there any reason to tell them that you sang 絢香's songs which don't have any relation with AKB/SKE??just wondering;
if i decided to add either the english ver or the Japanese ver of ayaka's song ''I believe'', ''Hajimari no toki'' the english ver or Mikazuki english ver,
how would either one be read? would ''i believe'' be read as it is or different?
and i just found out that you read ''Hajimari no toki'' as ''はじまりのとき'' & ''mikazuki'' - as ''三日月'', that's right, right?
I wonder if you like it. works as a humble version of I hope you like it.i sort of understand this half: イルカが好きかどうか分からないけど、
but what does the other half mean in english, please?: 気に入ってもらえたでしょうか。
also, what does this one mean in english?: このぬいぐるみとの写真をググタスか何かに載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです。 i know you said it's translation of my original english, but i'm just a bit confused
載せてもらえるとすごくうれしいです is just telling your wish "I'm happy if you do that".
Is there any reason to tell them that you sang 絢香's songs which don't have any relation with AKB/SKE??
I edited your post. Please do not use that abbreviation (your user name as well).
Google is your friend (or ggrks in Japanese).i was just asking how they would be read, that's all
Then, you should write the correct letter after you really sang the songs in order to avoid telling a lie.i didn't say yet, that i was going to sing any of them
I PMed you.i'm not sure i did, did i? where was that?
Then, you should write the correct letter after you really sang the songs in order to avoid telling a lie.
Google is your friend (or ggrks in Japanese).
I edited your post. Please do not use that abbreviation (your user name as well).
i think i found out what you meant
i think it was when i put: either the english ver or the Japanese ver of ayaka's song ''I believe''
my bad, sorry
I believe you can convey what you want to say without using the abbreviation. It's meaningless to edit your previous post if you use the same word again. Don't you think so?
I believe you can convey what you want to say without using the abbreviation. It's meaningless to edit your previous post if you use the same word again. Don't you think so?
Certainly not. あかりへ looks like you're writing a note to a close friend. Also, Toritoribeさん is a native Japanese speaker and an eloquent writer in both Japanese and English. You can almost always take his suggestions as correct - the only times I've seen him be 'wrong' are when he was misled by a lack of context and so gave the most common answer instead of the one for the situation (not a problem here), and of course the occasional typo. Given that it's almost certain that he's correct, it would really be better to ask -why- his answer is better.just one thing, though, wouldn't it be better to use ''akari e/akane e'' at the start of the letters?
even though you said to use 須田亜香里様 - Suda akari-sama/高柳明音様 - Takayanagi akane-sama. just wondering
just one thing, though, wouldn't it be better to use ''akari e/akane e'' at the start of the letters?
even though you said to use 須田亜香里様 - Suda akari-sama/高柳明音様 - Takayanagi akane-sama. just wondering
You shouldn't "merge" her translation you got in another forum and mine. We used different levels of polite forms.
The name at the top of a letter with an honorific such like 様, 殿 or 御中 shows that it's the name of the recipient. You can think the position of the name and honorifics implies "to (them)" in letters.in fact, I would like to ask, why are we omitting the へ? I don't understand why adding an honorific like 'sama' would make the 'he' disappear. I wouldn't have been surprised for it to be replaced with a more formal term, but I am a little surprised that it disappears.
Is there any reason you wrote まし twice?
As for errors, 歌った (utatta) is spelled with a small 'tsu' indicating a glottal stop, not a large 'tsu' that would be pronounced as 'tsu'. (The same for 歌って - uttate).
You イ characters have a top stroke that goes so far down that at first I thought I might be looking 人... the diagonal stroke should only go about halfway down the height of the vertical stroke.
以前あかりんさんが歌っていた「シンクロときめき」を聞いてすごく感動しました。and 以前ちゅりさんが歌っていた「夜風の仕業」を聞いてすごく感動しました。 are the explanation; "I was moved by your singing the song"
In your first letter, the つ in 歌っていた is bigger than the て, and the one in 歌ったんです is about the same size as the た. In the second letter in the same places, the つ are a little smaller but still centered in the line. The glottal stop little-つ is usually half-sized (or even smaller in some people's handwriting) and in horizontal writing lines up with the bottom of the characters so it basically appears half height.PS.
以前あかりんさんが歌っていた「シンクロときめき」を聞いてすごく感動しました。
9月にタレントショーというアマチュアのイベントがあったんですが、実はそこでこの歌を歌ったんです。
i was just wondering why you picked the word ''moved''
As I said in my previous post, シンクロときめき and 夜風の仕業 are not their original songs, so you need to explain why you mention these songs specifically in your letters to them.
I don't know what font you're using, but certainly on my screen in the above text the つ in the bolded words appears like that, half-size and down low.
Just so you know, google translate is pretty terrible. Sometimes it works perfectly - like with fixed phrases that have a translation that a human originally typed. It just looks up the translation for the expression without doing any interpretation, so of course the answer is good. But, most of the time, when it has to try to actually translate programmatically it comes up with a lot of garbled nonsense.what i did was,
i copied each line into google translate & then wrote it onto paper from there
but it's okay, as i currently rewriting them
Is there any reason you wrote まし twice?
EDIT:
The name at the top of a letter with an honorific such like 様, 殿 or 御中 shows that it's the name of the recipient. You can think the position of the name and honorifics implies "to (them)" in letters.
That's exactly what is explained in my quote; an example to explain the reason.that's not really what I meant
what I meant was why you picked that specific word
神セブン入りおめでとうございます。i was just wondering how you would say ''congratulatons on getting to top 7 in the Senbatsu Sousenkyo''?
That's exactly what is explained in my quote; an example to explain the reason.
神セブン入りおめでとうございます。
I don't think "congratulations" is appropriate for her (#14 --> #20).also, how would you say ''congratulations on getting to #20 in the Senbatsu Sousenkyo''?