Which of these translations is better?

[annabrie]

Hi, I'm new here, I need a help of a native Japanese to check if I am getting the right translation to Japanese. Here is the original English text: A navy captain is alerted by his First Mate that there is a pirate ship coming towards his position. He asks a sailor to get him his red shirt.The captain was asked, "Why do you need a red shirt?"The Captain replies, "So that when I bleed, you guys don't notice and aren's discouraged." They fight off the pirates eventually.The very next day, the Captain is alerted that 50 pirate ships are coming towards their boat. He yells, "Get me my brown pants! The Japanese translation: 海軍大佐は一等航海士から、一隻の海賊船がこちらに向かってくるとの警告を受けました。大佐は乗組員に、赤いシャツを持ってくるように言いました。「なぜ赤いシャツが必要なんです？」そう尋ねられると、大佐は答えました。「私が血を流したとき、お前たちが気付いて士気を失ったりしないようにするためだ」結局、彼らは海賊たちを撃退しました。その次の日、大佐は今度は50隻の海賊船がこの船に向かってきているという知らせを受けました。彼は叫びました。「俺の茶色のズボンを持ってこい！」..Please anyone tell me if translation is good. Thank you...

 

[annabrie]

Here is another translation: A navy captain is alerted by his First Mate that there is a pirate ship coming towards his position. He asks a sailor to get him his red shirt.The captain was asked, "Why do you need a red shirt?"The Captain replies, "So that when I bleed, you guys don't notice and aren's discouraged." They fight off the pirates eventually.The very next day, the Captain is alerted that 50 pirate ships are coming towards their boat. He yells, "Get me my brown pants!
海軍大佐は一等航海士から１艘の海賊船がこちらに向かっているとの報告を受けた。大佐は船員の一人に赤いシャツを持ってくるよう頼んだ。「なぜ赤いシャツが必要なのですか？」と尋ねられた大佐は、「もし傷を負って出血しても誰にも気付かれず、皆の士気が下がることもないからだ。」と答えた。やがて彼らは海賊を撃退した。その次の日、５０艘もの海賊船がこちらの船に向かっていると大佐は報告を受けた。「茶色のズボンを持って来い！」大佐は叫んだ。. WHich among these two has better translation. Thank you for your help.

 

[Toritoribe]

Both are not bad. I prefer the former one.

 

[annabrie]

Both are not bad. I prefer the former one.

Thank you...