Would you please correct my presentation?

[Concreteface]

I have to do this Japanese oral presentation, and I want to make sure that I don't have that many grammatical errors.
If somebody would correct it, it would be very much appreciated! ^^ Thank you!

 

[Mike Cash]

You will find us more willing to help you find and correct the errors yourself than we are to just correct your assignment for you.

 

[Toritoribe]

I have to do this Japanese oral presentation, and I want to make sure that I don't have that many grammatical errors.
If somebody would correct it, it would be very much appreciated! ^^ Thank you!

Please don't double post.

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That's too long! Here's obvious mistakes.

作画のみを担当する者も「漫画家」があります。
「漫画家」です / と呼ばれます。

お父さんがいちど一度もいったと思いました。
This doesn't makes sense.

お礼のことでした。
お金のことでした, maybe?

親面倒を見ざるを得なかった。
親の面倒を見ざるを得なかった。

家族を持つ彼らの可能性に影響を及ぼして、恋愛関係に係わりそうでありません。
This doesn't makes sense.