Sentence help please.

Damicci said:

I am still having some troubles with forming more complex sentences such as:

あきさんは時々私の言葉は冷たい気がすると言った。
Aki said 「Sometimes my words feel cold」.

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Probably something like "Aki-san said, 'sometimes I feel your words are cold.'"
Just remember ~気がする is "I feel" or "I get the feeling".

前にあったことあるような気がする (I feel like we've met before)
起こられた気がする (I feel I made [him] angry --- yeah, it's passive tense, but whatever)

今週末は忙しいけどまだあなたとあそびたい。
This weekend will be busy but I still want to hang out with you.

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Nice, but perhaps could leave out the anata?

土曜日のよる私達は話して遊んでビリヤードをした。
Saturday night we talked hung out and played pool（billiards）。

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You need some commas in your English. :/ Do you know the ～たり form? Good for connecting verbs. 私達は話したら遊んだりビリヤードをした。 Technically means did 'things like [but not limited to]". You can even say something like 私達は遊んだりした。You only list one verb, but imply you did others.

くみさんはTUCSONついて何が好きですか。
What is it about Tucson that you like？

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Needs a に after Tucson.

私はみちがいをあると知っている。 私に私の間違いを見せて下さい。
I know there are mistakes. Please show me my mistakes?
:sorry:

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You've said 私 3 times in the above sentence, and probably should not have said it even once. Also misspelled mistakes.
まちがえがあると知っている。書き直してください。

I changed the last part you said... just sounds better I think, but you could say a number of things. 正しい方を教えてください, etc.

Overall, pretty damn good though.

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My english grammar as far as writing goes is pretty bad,

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It may not be technically wrong, but for some reason I've never really seen について何が much at all.

Tuscon のどんなところが好きですか？ is isn't as intuitive for beginners perhaps, but turns out to be a more natural substitute ? :?

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それ以外は上手にかけていると思いますよ。

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間違いがあると思いますので、訂正をお願いします。

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"訂正"を分からなかっただから勉強します。

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