Please check my translation?

[Nocturne]

Hello all Yet another assignment I could use some help with. I went to the Eisa festival recently, and I wrote a news article about it. I have to record it etc. so if someone can please check my translation (I know there are many parts that need repairing) I'd appreciate it

「日本語」

最近 東京には旅行しました。 新宿区のエイサー祭りが見に行きました。 おきなわでエイサーは始めました。
ぶっきょうで、エイサーが祖先の霊をいわいます。 今、エイサーが年間を通じて、実行します。お祭りの間、大人と子供 はダンスしたり、歌ったりします。
少し演奏者は小さい「パランク」か大きい「おだいこ」 がひきます。
そこにいた時、エイサー祭りについて、かんきゃくがインタビューしました：

(Interview inserted here)

English:

Recently, I travelled to Tokyo to see the Eisa festival in Shinjuku. Eisa originated in Okinawa (as part of the O-Bon Festival (But I couldn't figure out how to put this in :\)), which celebrates ancestral spirits in the Buddhist religion. Eisa is now regularly performed throughout the year. It is a festival of music and dance that is performed by groups of adults and children. Some performers play drums ranging from the small handheld 'Paranku' to the large 'Odaiko'.

When I was there, I interviewed some spectators about the festival.

(Interview inserted here)

Thank you!

 

[Elizabeth]

Hello all Yet another assignment I could use some help with. I went to the Eisa festival recently, and I wrote a news article about it. I have to record it etc. so if someone can please check my translation (I know there are many parts that need repairing) I'd appreciate it
「日本語」
最近 東京には旅行しました。 新宿区のエイサー祭りが見に行きました。 おきなわでエイサーは始めました。

最近 東京に旅行しました

新宿区のエイサー祭りを見に(そこへ)行きました。

エイサーはおきなわで始まりました。


You may want to take another look over your grammar. ;-). This is just a start - but these are some pretty basic corrections.

 

[undrentide]

Green part is what Elizabeth san posted, the rest is one of the possible translations by myself.

Recently, I travelled to Tokyo to see the Eisa festival in Shinjuku.
最近 東京に旅行しました。新宿区のエイサー祭りを見に行きました。

Eisa originated in Okinawa (as part of the O-Bon Festival (But I couldn't figure out how to put this in :\)),
エイサーはおきなわでお盆の祭りの一環として始まりました。

which celebrates ancestral spirits in the Buddhist religion.
お盆は仏教で祖先の霊を祀る行事です。

Eisa is now regularly performed throughout the year.
今では、エイサーは年間を通じて、行われます。

It is a festival of music and dance that is performed by groups of adults and children.
お祭りの間、大人と子供は集団で踊ったり、歌ったりします。

Some performers play drums ranging from the small handheld 'Paranku' to the large 'Odaiko'.
太鼓を敲く人もいますが、太鼓は小さい「パランク」から大きい「大太鼓」まで（いろいろな大きさが）あります。

When I was there, I interviewed some spectators about the festival.
(Interview inserted here)
そこにいた時、私はエイサー祭りについて、かんきゃくにインタビューしました：

I think overall you are doing very well, just you may want to pay more attention to particles (が、に、etc.)

 

[Nocturne]

Thanks Elizabeth, and a HUGE thank you to you, Undrentide!!! I do need more help with particles... still find it so hard to know when to use each...

Just a quick question though:

太鼓を敲く人もいますが

Is that: たいこをはたくひともいますが ？

Having a few issues without the furigana, hehe.

Thank you again.

 

[undrentide]

Just a quick question though:

太鼓を敲く人もいますが

Is that: たいこをはたくひともいますが ？

太鼓を敲く人もいますが
Is that: たいこをたたくひともいますが

敲く＝たたく
to beat something to make sounds
e.g.
扉（とびら）をたたく to knock on the door
太鼓をたたく to beat the drum
手をたたく to clamp hands

 

[Toritoribe]

少し演奏者は小さい「パランク」か大きい「おだいこ」 がひきます。

FYI, the verb 弾[ひ]く is genarally used for "to play the strings (guitar, violin, harp, piano,,,)".
You can also use the kanji 叩く for たたく.