Introduction Project for Class

[Casey4825]

Hello all, for my Beginning JP class, I've been assigned a writing assignment in which I am to introduce myself. Before I submit it, could I please have it looked over for errors or things that I might do better? どもありがとうございます。

自己紹介
オデル・ケイシー
自己紹介させていただきます。私の名前はオデルです。 学生です。アメリカ人です。私はフロリダのブレデント ンの出身です。住まいはゲインズビルです。七月生まれ です。二十歳です。今、フロリダ大学の三年生です。専 攻は音楽です。私は英語と少し日本語を話します。今、 日本語と七学級の音楽のクラスを取っています。どうぞ よろしく。

 

[Toritoribe]

Well done! Just few corrections.

学生です。

You don't need to say 学生です here, since you said 今、フロリダ大学の三年生です later.

住まいは○○です。

Not incorrect, but ○○に住んでいます is more common.

英語と少し日本語を話します。

日本語が少し話せます would be more natural.

今、 日本語と七学級の音楽のクラスを取っています。

I can't get what 七学級 means.


I think you'd better be mindful of the protection of your personal information.

 

[Casey4825]

Thank you. Our sensei wants us to use sumai for now until she explains the -te forms of verbs. By using 「～が少し話します」, how do I work in the fact that speak English in the same sentence? As for 「七学級」, my dictionary has 学級（がっきゅう）listed as a count word for classes. So in that sentence, I'm trying to say that I'm taking Japanese Language and 7 music classes.

As for the personal info, I changed my last name and my age, but just wanted to have something there instead of blanks.

 

[Toritoribe]

Thank you. Our sensei wants us to use sumai for now until she explains the -te forms of verbs.

As for the personal info, I changed my last name and my age, but just wanted to have something there instead of blanks.

I see.

By using 「～が少し話します」, how do I work in the fact that speak English in the same sentence?

英語と、日本語が少し話せます。(potential)/日本語が少しと英語が話せます。

As for 「七学級」, my dictionary has 学級（がっきゅう）listed as a count word for classes. So in that sentence, I'm trying to say that I'm taking Japanese Language and 7 music classes.

学級 refers to "classroom". "Class" in the sense of "lesson" is 授業, and the general counter つ is used to count it. (コマ is also used espcially for classes in college. A bit slangy, though.)

音楽の授業を七つと日本語を取っています。

2
2 ((集合的))学級, クラスの学生（▼呼びかけにも用いる）；[C]((形容詞的))クラスの

a class reunion
（同窓生の）クラス会
the class clown
クラスの道化役
The whole class was invited to the party.
クラス全員がパーティーに招待された（▼×all the classとはあまりいわない）
My class is ［((英))are］ going to the lake.
うちのクラスは湖に行く予定です
"Open your textbooks, class, "she said.
「みなさん教科書を開きなさい」と彼女は言った.


3 [C]（クラスの）授業, 講義, 講習；[C]授業時間；教室

in class
授業中（は）
attend ［cut］ a French class
フランス語の授業に出る［をサボる］
The class was carried on in English.
授業は英語でなされた.
▼「…の授業」はa music class（音楽のクラス）, a class in history（歴史の授業）, a class for shorthand（速記クラス）などという.

classの意味 - goo辞書 英和和英

 

[Casey4825]

Again, thank you for your help!

音楽の授業を七つと日本語を取っています。

Due to the level of vocabulary that my class knows would it be acceptable to write 「七つの音楽のクラス...」? Also, could you help me with the sentence structure that you used? How does the usage of the first を work?

英語と、日本語が少し話せます。(potential)/日本語が少しと英語が話せます。

I'm not familiar with the potential tense yet. How does it work?

 

[Toritoribe]

Due to the level of vocabulary that my class knows would it be acceptable to write 「七つの音楽のクラス...」?

No. クラス only refers to "classroom" in Japanese, as same as 学級. It isn't usually used for the meaning "lesson". 七つの音楽の授業/講義 is acceptable.

Also, could you help me with the sentence structure that you used? How does the usage of the first を work?

That's just the order of the words thing.

subject/object + "numeral/adverb which expresses quantity" + predicate

授業を七つ取る。（＝七つの授業を取る。）
take seven classes

人が１０人いる。（＝１０人の人がいる。）
There are 10 people.

服をたくさん買う。（＝たくさんの服を買う。）
buy many clothes

日本語を少し話す。（＝少しの日本語を話す。）
speak a little Japanese.

I'm not familiar with the potential tense yet. How does it work?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanes...ions#Potential

OK, then 私は英語と少しの日本語を話します might be appropriate.