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Classical Japanese Poetry

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I am an American guy who studied in Japan and I have been working on translating some old Japanese poems. I set up a blog to show what I've done so far. I would really like some feedback for how I've done so far.

Classical Japanese Translations
 
Well done. Here's my tips.

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他の藤波 --> の藤波

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You missed the meaning of やらじとや, i.e., やらないために.

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As you might know, あしひきの is the 枕詞 for 山 and doesn't have any meanings. The auther wasn't in a mountain at that time.

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こずる --> こず (梢)

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ぬしさだまらね --> ぬしさだまら

ぬしさだまらぬ恋せらる more likely means "I have a feeling of love with someone, who is not a specific person".
あぢきなく means "somehow" here.

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~な・・・そ is a structure for "prohibition".
声なきかせそ: Don't sing to me.

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さへ "Even" suggests that the author might not be able to go back to the hometown and meet the people never again.

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思ふのから --> 思ふのから

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韓紅 -->

唐紅のふり出でてぞ鳴く expresses the cuckoo sings like dyeing cloth red. It's not about their tongue color.

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昔をのみぞ鳴く --> をのみぞ鳴く
Again, あしひきの is a 枕詞.
たれかまさる is not 誰が勝る. That's 誰にも負けない.
 
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