Are these lyrics translated correctly?

[BackwoodsBoy]

I love this song, sing it at work almost everyday. But is the English translation correct in the verse and chorus?

 

[Mike Cash]

Translation requests: please read first! | Japan Forum

 

[BackwoodsBoy]

Translation requests: please read first! | Japan Forum

Ah thanks, I have a limited time to use this between work and what not, I'll check that out before I post again

 

[Mike Cash]

Ah thanks, I have a limited time to use this between work and what not, I'll check that out before I post again

No problem. It doesn't really quite exactly apply to your post here, but it may help you in the future or help you understand if people don't trip over each other in a mad rush to fulfill your request in this thread.