Request I've translated this correctly

Hi,
I'm trying to put together an engraving for my senpai to thank him for teaching me and my children, and would like it to be in Japanese (with his name in Roman script). I've made a first attempt at the translation, but I'm not sure if it's correct and culturally appropriate.
Would somebody with native Japanese skills verify my translation for me?

Here's the original English:

And here's my crude translation to Japanese:


Do I have the above translation correct?
Thanks and Regards.

Not wrong except the first line, but I would say;

Danielle先輩へ
感謝を込めて
あなたの生徒より

Thank you

Toritoribe said:

Not wrong except the first line, but I would say;

Danielle先輩へ
感謝を込めて
あなたの生徒より

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Wow! Thank you so much for the correction.
This is wonderful.