Please correct this writing

keikei000 · 28 Oct 2017

I'm a high school student from Japan. I started keeping a diary in English, so I want someone to point out errors in my writing.

"I want to be desicive! I can't decide things on the spot. It takes me quite a lot of time to decide about something. Now I'm setting a schedule for my study(I'm preparing for the entrance exam of university),but everytime I do this I waste some hours deciding whether I should do something or not. I know this is a very bad tendency of mine, but I can't get out of it. If I don't make any plans at all, I will get anxious all the more because studying without any plans is really uneasy...."

joadbres · 28 Oct 2017

Your writing is quite good. It is probably better than that of many American high school students.
I would only suggest a few minor changes:
- decisive is spelled wrong
- 'decide about something': 'decide something' or 'make a decision about something' are more natural
- 'study': 'studying' or 'studies' are more natural
- 'university entrance exam' is more natural
- 'every time' is two words
- 'waste some hours': this is OK, but 'waste several hours' or 'waste a few hours' are more natural
- 'anxious all the more': this is OK, but 'even more anxious' is more natural
- 'without any plans': this is OK, but 'without a plan' is more natural
- 'is really uneasy': this is wrong. It should be changed to something like 'makes me really uneasy'

Great job!!

keikei000 · 28 Oct 2017

joadbres said:
Your writing is quite good. It is probably better than that of many American high school students.
I would only suggest a few minor changes:
- decisive is spelled wrong
- 'decide about something': 'decide something' or 'make a decision about something' are more natural
- 'study': 'studying' or 'studies' are more natural
- 'university entrance exam' is more natural
- 'every time' is two words
- 'waste some hours': this is OK, but 'waste several hours' or 'waste a few hours' are more natural
- 'anxious all the more': this is OK, but 'even more anxious' is more natural
- 'without any plans': this is OK, but 'without a plan' is more natural
- 'is really uneasy': this is wrong. It should be changed to something like 'makes me really uneasy'

Great job!!

thank you!!
Actually I consulted my dictionary when I wrote this, but I'm happy to hear your praise!

Mike Cash · 29 Oct 2017

Use "unsettling" instead of "uneasy".

keikei000 · 29 Oct 2017

Mike Cash said:
Use "unsettling" instead of "uneasy".

I see! "uneasy" can't be used when subject is not a person?

diligentcircle · 30 Oct 2017

Not quite.

"Uneasy" is a way to describe how someone feels. It can be any sentient being, actually (e.g. you might say the dog is looking uneasy during a thunderstorm).

So the problem with your usage isn't that the subject isn't a person, it's that "uneasy" is being used to describe a situation ("studying without any plans"). You could also correct it to: "Studying without any plans makes me really uneasy."

keikei000 · 30 Oct 2017

JuliMaruchan said:
Not quite.

"Uneasy" is a way to describe how someone feels. It can be any sentient being, actually (e.g. you might say the dog is looking uneasy during a thunderstorm).

So the problem with your usage isn't that the subject isn't a person, it's that "uneasy" is being used to describe a situation ("studying without any plans"). You could also correct it to: "Studying without any plans makes me really uneasy."

Indeed I remember having seen "uneasy" applied to a sentient that is not a person. Thank you!

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