I write lyric poems and poems in Japanese and I just wanted people to critique it and tell me what you think. I've been studying Japanese for about 6 years now but I've never been to japanese before. Therefore, I might have some errors in my poetry. Please correct it. Thankyou.
Name: Where is Godot?
by: kalani
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Nankai jibun ni iikikasetara
Shinjireru you ni narundarou
Tada kono genjitsu ga katte na hodo
Anzen na kono yume wo yariba ni shita dake
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Nankai jibun ni toikaketara
Hontou no kotae ga dasu ndarou
Mitometakunai to omotta kimochi ga
Atta kanousei wo ikkai mo mushi shita koto nai