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I'm writing a description for a Fiverr gig which includes proofreading and sprucing up CVs and it goes like this:
Today's job market is a tough one. More and more people have access to higher education while employers flip through dozens of impressive resumes... and the one that catches their eye is the most articulate one.

I understand that this request is ridiculous, but listening to Engrish all day long for the past year and a half has seriously messed up my sentence patterns. I need to know if the part "and the one that catches their eye is the most articulate one" makes sense and if there is any other way to restructure it and emphasize the "articulate" even more.

I appreciate the help.
 

Mike Cash

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Reverse it to "the most articulate one is the one that catches their eye".

I would use "well-written" instead of "articulate", as I tend to associate the latter with verbal skills.
 

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Thanks, Mike. Do you think it is better to use academic jargon when writing a CV or to stick to colloquial English? Looks like much of what I was taught at college is only useful for writing academic theses, not so much for practical work.
 

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I'm afraid I know nothing about CVs and really can't help with that.
 

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Thanks, Mike. Do you think it is better to use academic jargon when writing a CV or to stick to colloquial English? Looks like much of what I was taught at college is only useful for writing academic theses, not so much for practical work.

There's no golden formula for a CV. It depends on the culture, field and even the reader's mood/flexibility.

For example, do a google search for a Japanese cv, and you'll see how different it looks from a European one. But then, people in the publishing/creative/design sector could make one very different from a law practitioner cv within one country. A designer might make his cv an example of his creativity, whereas a lawyer might make it look as formal as possible.

As for me personally, I try to keep it on two pages. I start with my personal information, a formal photo of myself, and a short summary about who I am and what I want in life and work.
Right after that I mention some achievements in bullets, but I match the achievements with the job that I am applying for. I follow with the companies that I worked for, and finish with educational history and gained skills. I try to keep in short and simple, since thedetailed stuff is in the accompanying letter.
 

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Thank you for your reply, Cocoichi. I know it depends on the culture, I've written CVs for people from Asia and the Balkans before. I wanted to know about an American CV because it's quite different - I read some examples and they seem bombastic and somewhat laid back, almost as if they are trying to seem friendly, casual and powerful at the same time, rather than professional. I thought Mike was born in the US and he could tell me more about it.
 
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